1st 16 bars composition practice #2

This is the first 16 bars of the composition again. I tried again with a few changes and it turned out to be better than the last video. The tempo is now correct, and the techniques is better. After this i will combine this withe he 2nd half of the composition so it will become a full song. Even thought this is already 2 tries, i still need to improve on a lot of things